I love rhymes. Rhymes make poetry so much more interesting. It does not matter if it is forced or contrived. I am just not comfortable if it does not rhyme. I have tried a variety of rhyme schemes on a variety of topics here . I have bent some rules in the name of poetic freedom though. Read on then!
Alternate Rhyme
Nature
The sound of water flowing
The touch of a mammal’s fur
The sight of the sun rising
Oh! You just got to love nature
Couplets
Music
Silver vessels falling on the floor
Ticking clock or a smashing door
You even enjoy the sound of a squeaky chair
When you realize music is everywhere
Enclosed Rhyme
Explosion
I usually go in thinking- ‘damn! I should retire’
But, inside the building was my sweet old Jane
And, I wanted to see her again
So I cut the red wire
Limerick
Ghosts
There was once a boy named Ted
Who was afraid to look under his bed
One day he looked
He was so spooked
To the futon shop he fled
Monorhyme
Smile
When we see it on a baby’s face
Our life seems brighter than the sun’s rays
So don’t worry about anything anyone says
Because days with smiles become better days
Simple 4-line
Love
On days when I feel so down
That the life in me starts to dwindle
All I need is to hear your voice
The flame in me starts to kindle
Cinquain
Rape
Eyes Closed
Her world enveloped in sadness
None she hurt; no threat she posed
But there she was, taken, used and disposed
Madness
Rhyme royal
War
Jack joined the infantry
Off to enlist he sped
The will fight for his country
Didn't last long; a bullet hit his head
Burying him in a sea of red
Rarely can people think very far
When governments decide to fight a war
Clerihew
Legend has it
Sir Ravindra Jadeja
Once acted in a movie that hit the screens
He played the role of a ninja
And used a stunt double for the crying scenes
5 comments:
it is a good post, but some of the verses are too forced. It is like you went out of the way searching for words that rhyme. I loved a few like explosion,nature n music, the final few did not sound cohesive enough especially rhyme royal. here the sentences are not ordered based on events. you have to enlist before you join and you are missing some connectors in the next lines.
Sorry for being very critical. It does not happen too often so i jumped at the opportunity. Overall good one! i did not know there were so many kinds of rhyme!!
Hmm, thanks for your comment. The part about rhyme royal. Well, its like a stating a fact in the first verse and the next verse describing how he did it. And about connectors, ever heard of poetic freedom .. lol. Anyway it has a challenging rhyme scheme, A-B-A-B-B-C-C. So i think it has to be sung in a certain way in order to be cohesive.
true i agree with poetic freedom but it must sound natural only under those circumstances is it ok. I am not saying you are incorrect, but rather it seemed like an unnecessary mincing of words!
Rhyming is hard.. and you'v done a pretty neat job especially in the first few..
Cheers!
" It does not matter if it is forced or contrived. I am just not comfortable if it does not rhyme"
My first line.
I know I'm not a poet and I'm not a writer. But I will always keep trying to be both. Next time you will find a better piece I promise. I'm glad you could enjoy this.(however much)
Hi Anirudh
Good attempt.keep trying.
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